(I have only seen the first chapter, so this is based around the first chapter.) Negative opinions: The one flaw I've notice is; there is too many paragraphs. It is difficult to read when everything is split into paragraphs. I'd advise not to make every couple of sentences into paragraphs, especially if the story part is still being continued, it should've been put into an entire paragraph and not split into smaller paragraphs. And when the story is changing the setting or generally changing, that's when a new paragraph should start. The second flaw would be; use of grammar. I have seen multiple times where the grammar is being misused. Where there should have been a comma or a period. I'd advise them to work on that. The only flaws I've seen so far.

Positive opinions: The first thing I'm liking is; the story. The story is well written, and it isn't focusing on details and has only put important ones in. The story makes the reader think and wonder about the story, which is why it became so successful in the mcyt community/fandom. Even I cannot stop reading it. The second thing that's great is; the characters. I really like how the author captured the characters personality and everything. And I can't wait to start reading the next few chapters, can't wait to see how the characters change within the story.