Script Workshop #1
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vegeto123[OP]
16.08.2020 18:37
LinkWelcome to Script Workshop! Here we will work on finishing and revising scenes from scripts I write.
Let's begin with a scene from the Juice Movie script.
vegeto123[OP]
16.08.2020 18:37
Link(In Front of Juices House)
Laney and Joey are waiting for Juice on his front lawn. Joeys older brother Dave is waiting in the car.(Dave: What's takin' so long!?)(Laney turns around: Oh shut up and just wait would ya! Jeez.)(Laney turns back around to face the house and looks over at Joey: He said he'd only be a few minutes.)( juice opens the door carrying a bag:Ok, see in a few days ya old fart!)Juice slams the door. He runs, dragged to a jog by his bag, over to the other two:Bad news!)(Joey looks at juice approaching:So are they on their way?)(Juice stops: Nah, Baby is stuck at his grandma's for another week, and Tubs is going to comicon.)(Joey rolls his eyes:Great.)(Laney looks at Juice:So it'l just be the three of us?)(Juice looks at her with a dumb expression on his face:Oh wow do you here that folks she's got it!Tell 'er what she wins Jim!)( Joey answers the fake microphone in Juices hand, she wins a luxury vacation to her parents house in NewBrunswick!)(Juice retracts the fake mic and gives Laney a.
vegeto123[OP]
16.08.2020 18:38
Linklook of disappointment)
That's only the first chunk of the scene but we can start there.
(In front of Juice's house)
(Laney and Joey are waiting for Juice on his front lawn. Joey's older brother Dave is waiting in the car.)
Dave: "What's takin' so long?!"
Laney: (turns around to face Dave) "Oh shut up and just wait, would ya?! ...Jeez." (turns back around to face the house and Joey) "He said he'd only be a few minutes..."
Juice: (opens door carrying a bag) "Ok, see ya in a few days ya old fart!" (slams the door behind him, then awkwardly jogs over to the other two) "Bad news!"
Joey: (turns to look at Juice) "So are they on their way?"
Juice: (stops when he's in front of them) "Nah, Baby is stuck at his grandma's for another week, and Tubs is going to comicon."
Joey: (rolls eyes) "...great."
Laney: (looks at Juice) "So it'll just be the three of us?"
Juice: (looks at her with a sarcastic expression) "Oh wow! Do you hear that folks??" (looks towards an imaginary audience) She's got it! (looks at Jim) "Tell 'er what she wins Jim!" (he stuck out his hand for an imagina
-ry mic)
Joey: "She wins a luxury vacation to New Brunswick! Staying with her parents of course." (sneers at Laney)
Juice: (he retracted his hand and deadpanned at Laney)
Laney: (rolls eyes, embarrassed and annoyed)
Dave: (scowls at the three) "Are you all gonna stand there all day and chit chat?! Get over here!"
---end---
(Laney lowers her eyes and mumbles:Whatever ya dicklet.)MEEP MEEP(Dave: C'mon let's go!!)(Joey turns to yell at Dave:Holy **** man! Wait two seconds!)(Juice taps Joey and he turns back:So everyone got what they were allotted to bring?)(Laney raised her bag:Yup I got the drinks and lights 'n' stuff)(Juice:good.)(Joey: I got the weed and the snacks, and my and your tents.)(Juice gave a half smile: Ha Ha! Nice.)(Joey sticks a thumb back at the car:We should go before Dave drives off without us.)(Dave: Hurry up!!!)(They all turn and run at the car Joey shouts:We're comin' jeez!
END SCENE