play with your emo-tions
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dorito[OP]
11.09.2019 18:46
LinkDeep down below,in my heart,in my soul,
i cast away everything,my fortune,my gold
Even my family and also my home
all of my friends and their cheerful tones
i only believe in all that is right
i may get in trouble,for starting a fight,
but maybe because,later that night
something would happen,something not right
and i was caught in all of the drama
just my luck to get caught in the drama
life really sucks,we know that by now
cause somebody told us,really deep down,
life isn't an ad,you cant just skip it,
you get one chance only,i'm not joking
Our life's hard to live,so is it worth living it?
This world isn't perfect,so why not just leave it?
............
These are the words of a very sad poet,
don't take them for granted,or you might just regret it.
OwoTheFurr-E
12.09.2019 18:35
LinkInteresting, perhaps just to me,
I'm also a poet, as you can see,
Yet I'll criticize your poem, through poetry.
Some of the words don't rhyme alright,
But it's not as bad as eating limes at midnight.
Your punctuation is interesting, I see,
On a rating it's 50/50.
Keep making poems, just like me.
Poems make others happy,
Sad like the rain, gory like the kill.
I'll still think you have great poetry skill. ;)