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22.12.2017
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Jordannthedog[OP]
22.12.2017 19:35
Linkback story here
Jordannthedog[OP]
22.12.2017 19:38
Linkokay here mom took out her eyes a stiched them with buttons .then here dad found out that her mom did that to her.after her dad found out her thurned her mom to a doll.then he did sucide and turn her to a demon voodoo doll killler monster wolf super powered girl.
SmilingNyan
22.12.2017 19:40
LinkThat escalated quickly
Jordannthedog[OP]
22.12.2017 19:41
Linkyeah
Jordannthedog[OP]
22.12.2017 19:42
Linkit has more so here it is
Jordannthedog[OP]
22.12.2017 19:47
Linkafter that mess she turned out to have deppression.and at school shewas being bulllied and the killed them.2 years later it became to much so she had a idea to block everbody from her life and trusted NO ONE .5 days later.she got bored and started to haunt houses with magic.she visted saint as well and scared people with her yello button eyes.she also scared people with her wolf form by getting into their houses and pretended to be parollized.2 days later.she was begening to be hunted so each month she turns to a wolf and live outside for 5 days
ShadowDaFox
22.12.2017 20:12
LinkSounds like a Mary Sue fangirl XD
SmilingNyan
22.12.2017 20:15
LinkClassic edge sue right there
River-Runner
26.12.2017 19:01
LinkO.k for you two who are saying Mary Sue and Edge Sue: She a blossoming story writer who is probably just trying to write something with a character who has a back story. At least she used effort in this story. If she didn't put effort this would be the most boring thing ever. Its not that bad. We all know we started somewhere with an at least SOMEWHAT, SOMEWHAT, Mary Sue character and story. If you say you didn't, then your probably lying to yourself about your own past. If you did mean what you said as an insult then at least this message is here for future reference. As to you writer and artist: I thought the story was nice and I would LOVE to hear a bit more about this. And also never EVER stop working at what you love. -Sincerely, ME. BYEEEE <3
River-Runner
26.12.2017 19:03
LinkBTW! That "did" in sentence 8 " If you did mean what you said as an insult" That "did" was meant to be a "didn't". Good day.
SmilingNyan
26.12.2017 19:07
Linkoh yeah for certain my first character was a total mary sue there is a reason i hide her story from the eyes of anyone that isnt me or my friends that were there when i was writing it
but no one ever told me she was a mary sue
and i thought she was a good character
no one ever told me so i thought she wasnt a sue she was perfectly fine and a good character, and i kept making characters like that. no one ever gave me criticism, so i couldn't improve nearly as easily as I would have if i had gotten criticism, even someone being a bit of a dick and just flat-out telling me that she was a sue. my writing stagnated for years because of that.
if you act like someone's first work is amazing and beautiful and their characters aren't sues, if all you ever give them is praise, they won't improve easily. and when they finally do realize their mistakes, they'll feel lke they did something wrong and bad and it was all their fault they should hve known better. but they shouldn't have. it's not their job.
River-Runner
27.12.2017 16:54
LinkBut if you go and just say Mary sue that isn't even helpful criticism
SmilingNyan
27.12.2017 16:59
LinkEven if it's not helpful you can learn from it. I admit I didn't take giving good criticism in mind but still
If you can't learn from that then... You need to learn how to listen to what people say and evalutate yourself to see if their supposedly unhelpful crit is a real complaint or just a joke
River-Runner
27.12.2017 17:23
LinkOK your right but I'm like 1/8 correct.