Lyric testing go brrrrrr again
by:
bratty-artist 
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19.07.2020
23 comments
bratty-artist[OP]
19.07.2020 20:04
Linklet's try not to sound like a rip-off boys!
bratty-artist[OP]
19.07.2020 20:07
LinkI feel like I'm being watched
In this infinite war I fought
Trying to get by in life
But there is an obstacle that tries
To make me want to die
The eyes
Watching me from the corner
They try
To lie, lie, lie
Their way into my head
Damn, I wish I was dead
bratty-artist[OP]
19.07.2020 20:10
Link"They don't want you"
"They don't need you"
Says a voice inside my head
It gives me comfort
It gives me meaning
But it wishes I was dead
Ooooooooooooh
Oh, dead
Why can't I be dead?
bratty-artist[OP]
19.07.2020 20:14
LinkSome nights I lie in bed
Wondering why i won't chop off my head
Why I can't just agree
That nobody should trust me
"Manipulator"
" They won't come back for you sooner or later "
The words eat up my head just like a huge alligator
And sometimes I wish I was dead
Oooooooooooooh dead
Why can't I be dead?
bratty-artist[OP]
19.07.2020 20:35
LinkStarvation is a good one too
Though hard to execute
You can last for long enough
Before your body turns on you
At this thought the voice inside
Wonders why I would even try
I am in pretty good shape
Mabye it isn't the best take
Oooooooooh dead
Why can't I be dead?
bratty-artist[OP]
19.07.2020 22:02
LinkOne cut
Two scars
"People love you how you are!"
That's a lie
Why do you try
Cover it up with a smile
Secretly I want to die
Hhhhhhhhhh Idk give me opinions
ok, this one is better and sounds more original, but the "lie, lie, lie" part doesnt really fit- it would sound better with just one "lie" but dont know the beat of the song, but im pretty sure it would sound better with the music not just by its self
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"Your legs must be sore for JUMPING TO CONCLUSONS!!"
-toby determined, gravity falls
yes this is great tgrybfvhnj if you ever decide to make this a song,, i wouldn't mind singing it for you uwu
I’m not really an expert with music because I don’t listen to it constantly but this is neat, that’s all I have to say jajshahhshejehaha
it's good!
but um, some parts seem a little...much?
like i get it's suppose to explain how you feel and stuff but maybe try making things more poetic in a way i guess
like instead of saying "why can't i be dead" maybe make it more expressive?
like for example,
let's say i'm writing a song about insomnia and how i wish i could just sleep and this is one line:
"i wish i could stay asleep
and i wish i could dream"
instead maybe like:
"i wish my closed eyes would be guaranteed
and see an alternate world built just for me"
i don't know, i'm just throwing stuff out there