its actually really good

ur welcome

A lot of the notes clash together, making the song sound like a bunch of mumbo jumbo (no offense). I would recommend listening to the music over and over, and seeing which notes go together well. I would also reccomend doing the main notes first (melody), and then adding additional notes to go along with the melody (harmony). (if thatz what ur already doing then im sry aaa!!)

btw i got bored so i decided to redo the first part: https://musiclab.chromeexperiments.com/Song-Maker/song/5080167685292032

ty ^^!!

ISS SO GOOD better than anything I did at least