1. too much detail i gotta stop writing details that doesn't even matter, it's so bad that it takes up and entire paragraph. i have to tone it down, and try not to get into detail that doesn't even matter. 2. speech i need to stop doing: "[talking]" [character] said, with might. As [character 2] said in response, "[talking]", which made [character] quiver. As they began fighting again... [more story.] and do: "[talking]" [character] said, with might. As [character 2] said in response, "[talking]". Which made [character] quiver. As they began fighting again... [more story.] i hate how i do that.