Well, its definitely better, thats for sure. About the shoulder angle, tho. It seems like you’re drawing the shoulders too low. Thats not really a natural resting place for a person’s shoulders to sit, is it? Therefore, you need to draw the shoulder angle more level, rather than angled. The curl in the back was fine the way it was before. What i was saying about my bangs, they come down, over my forehead, and then curl to one side of my face abruptly. You also have made my hair longer than in the previous drawing, as you kept the ending spot in the same place. Im gonna make a drawing, and upload it on here, and it will show you how my bangs should look, from my perspective, that is

Here is that diagram i promised you Its so bad.... ?