*Kantari stalked from the dark shadows of the grove, her dark werewolf like figure blended into the darkness, except her bright yellow eyes like that of a black cat*
K- She kept walking, ready to summon her blade in case of emergency. Yet she still trudged forward, Her heavy clothes weighing her down. She tugged at the bottom of the red sweater beneath her layered black shawl.
K- She whipped around, her dagger summoned and in her hand. She jumped back, landing a few feet back. She breathed heavily. She pulled on her mask, covering up her face completely.
(Young Adult. Like the cool kid fantasy stuff that I read >:D)
K- She fell on her side, and grunted as she landed. She got up shakily, throwing her dagger at Kantari.
oooooh, yee)
*Kantari froze as she took the dagger to the stomach, she dropped he sword and cupped he hands around the dagger's hilt, a look of fear filled her eyes as she realized... after having slain dragons... a human would vanquish her*
K- She walked up to Kantari slowly, having realized what she had done. She slumped in front of her, taking the dagger from her stomach. She vanished it. "Let me see the wound."
(Even better. Percy Jackson is middle grade. Young Adult it stuff like The Mortal Instruments, Carry On, and Twilight. Your writing it T H A T G O O D.)
(Yes really. One of the ones I'm reading has a very similar writing style to yours, when it comes to description.)
K- "The state the world is in is more important about ending than you." She put her hands on the wound, careful to be gentle.
believe it or not, my descriptiveness comes from having read the whole percy jackson series, as well as 8th grade vocab)
*Kantari tensed with pain as K came in contact with the wound, her tail flicked uncomfortably*
(just friggin sips lemonade while a kid almost dies)
K- "No need." She stands up, looking around. She hesitates as she slowly takes off her mask, as Kantari is someone that can be trusted.
(Yep, and Kantari almost killed her and now she is being trusted to look at your face? Noice, and also Twilight is mommy porn no offense)
Aidan: *leans on the wall, still drinking his lemonade*
K- She smiled lightly, then looked to Aidan, far away. "A person." Her întuneric instincts tell her to feed, but she pushes those thoughts down. "We should go talk to them."
K- She looks to Aidan.
Søppel- Yeah yeah, screw you.
K- She turns around, seeing Søppel.
Søppel- You just had to go and get lost, didn't you? So, who's the friend?
Søppel- "Heh." She turns to K, pointing back to Kantari. "Get a load of this kid, heh."
K- "And here I was, thinking we could save the planet or something."